I think it's brilliant! And so so true!

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Why do we kill people
who kill people, to show people that
killing people is wrong

Thanks!!!

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Your welcome (:

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Why do we kill people
who kill people, to show people that
killing people is wrong

This is a neat little poem. The symmetry of it all does the poem good justice. Really, the word choice makes it all work out well, and to be completely honest, the only thing that I see that I can really be nitpicky about is the fact that there's a comma missing after "Tug-hard to make ends meet".

Well done. ^^

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Thankies!

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This is life after we age.. and life before we do. I like it very much.

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thanks daedaebeans!

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I can count the things I know about poetry on one hand. That hand lost all its fingers in a freak typing accident. But I know what I like and I like this.

If I was trying to be helpful, and I suspect I possibly could, I might say that this is to poetry as a doorhandle is to engineering. It is brief and uncomplicated and as such there is very little that could go wrong with it and that is by no means a bad thing. It does seem somewhat like a list but I think the way punctuation works in my head makes things read out odd sometimes.

Growing up is something that interests me in a slightly morbid sense. As I find myself being in such a position, more and more so as time creeps forward, that the words garner a personal qaulity and it is one that endears.

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No problem. ^^

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